This is very beautiful. There is one thing I think could be improved, but it's kinda hard to explain with words.
The shape of the black dress is very... horizontal, and kind of stops the flow of the picture. I wouldn't advise making it diagonal or vertical in shape, but just to make it curve from it's horizontal shape into the vertical shape of the figure. (This would also bring the black area down closer to the rule of thirds, rather than being almost halfway up the image. There's no assurance that will be an improvement for the picture, but it tends to do good things for compositions.)
Err... I can send you a sketch of what I mean if that's too hard to follow. ;
I would be very interested about a sketch from you, because my english is kinda terrible and I'm not sure that I did understood what you meant. anyway, thank you very much for this constructive comment.
I made thumbnails of each of the different composition types: [link]
Along with some guide-lines showing the general shape of the image.
See the way the curved one has an almost horizontal shape at the bottom? That keeps the bold contrast of the picture (which is lost in either the diagonal or vertical versions)
But because the shape curves up into the vertical shape of the figures, it flows more naturally than the horizontal version. Also the point where the white meets the black is lower than the horizontal version, so it's closer to 2/3rds down the picture, whereas the horizontal one is closer to halfway.
I just noticed this, but it might also help to extend the right side of the picture by about 40-50 pixels so that the right side of the figure in white is further from the centre of the image.
(I really like the eyelashes that overlap the hair, by the way.)
I would say that my favourite is the vertical one and the curved one. both works much better than my original composition. If you don't mind, I'm gonna follow your instructions and redo my work with this guideline.
I'm not sure about extending the right side of the picture, by the way, because I want the viewer to have nothing to see but the girls. Anyway, I'm gonna see how it works.
yeah, you are right about the eyelashes. At first it wasn't meant to be that way, but I figured out that it could be interesting. I think it is.
You prove to me yet again that no matter how many times I look away from this site that provides me with kittens and emo on the front page every time I look I get to see truly amazing gems...masterpieces when I look at your new pieces. I love this one vs v2. That might be partly to my preference to verticle pieces but also to the space at the bottom. In my work I love to leave a space at either at the bottom or somewhere else for the viewer to get lost and think about the work and themselves. This is truly the case in yours. I look at the wonderful illustration and i get lost in the areas at the bottom with the accents of white...wonderful!
p.s. you should make this a print someday...when i get a job in my field or at least make some extra money from freelance I would love this piece!!
and you prove e that you should come by more often.
thank you very much for your detailled coment. And I really understand what you mean with the lower part. I could agree, but I think I prefer the v.2, mainly because when you look at it tou are not disturbed from the faces and the drawing work. Anyway, I knew this one was interesting too, that's why I uploaded it.
sublime merveilleux magnifique!ce dessin derange aussi je trouve avec ses deux visages et buste collé sont-ce les meem personne?une autre derriere?une a l'air un peu en colere et l'autre joyeuse et moqueuse quel contraste!